slicer's masterstroke

[deathcurse]

what are you my fucking agent now?

No, I'm not your agent. I actually exist.

[deathcurse]

At least his writer’s block had been completely shattered

Thank God for that!

You do know it's not an actual block, right?

He drove to town just to stock up on potato chips and soda.

You ran out of food so you go buy chips and soda? No wonder you're so fucking fat.

He had had an intense vision

Explain to me why this needed two had's.

He knew in his gut

That's the chips and soda.

The green and white symbol

You were watching the St. Patrick's Day parade, doofus.

This fence had a name: the guillotine fence.

"Say, boss. What do you we call this thing? It's half fence, half guillotine."

"THE GUILLOTINE FENCE."

Then they were all quickly beheaded with a sword.

Huh? That's not a guillotine.

One prisoner sat on the ground where he had his arms and legs sliced off in six inch sections.

Were these sections being measured?

Women screamed with grief!

I think you mean terror or horror. Grief implies a sadness. Who is watching someone getting chopped into six inch pieces and then reacting with mere sadness?

That is what Tom was writing about: the strange power of this evil and its unholy ability to rip a baby’s face off with a smile.

Wait, what? Who's ripping babies faces off?

With extreme intelligence

How would you know it if you saw it?

Finally, he clicked off his computer

Who clicks off their computer?

Before he fell asleep, he felt as if a hand was touching his leg, and then it whispered in his ear before flying off. He didn’t hear words, more of a clicking sound that reminded him of an insect.

So was it a whisper or a clicking?

He saw the image of sand dunes under orange sunlight, but the light felt filthy and ancient.

What the fuck? How can light feel filthy and ancient?

And that clicking sound was like some kind of communication used before words.

People still communicate with clicking sounds. In fact, the word "click" is a clicking sound.

Also, was it like some kind of communication or was it some kind of communication?

It said, “I’m here.” Tom knew that was true and then fell asleep.

Wow. Even Tom is bored with this story.

[kriptyc]

He had had an intense vision

Explain to me why this needed two had's.

because it was previous, idiot.

Then they were all quickly beheaded with a sword.

Huh? That's not a guillotine.

right, because it is the guillotineFENCE, moron

Women screamed with grief!

I think you mean terror or horror. Grief implies a sadness. Who is watching someone getting chopped into six inch pieces and then reacting with mere sadness?

no, this was different than just horror, fool.

Finally, he clicked off his computer

Who clicks off their computer?

it's not hard to do, just a click--what are you fucking deaf?

Before he fell asleep, he felt as if a hand was touching his leg, and then it whispered in his ear before flying off. He didn’t hear words, more of a clicking sound that reminded him of an insect.

So was it a whisper or a clicking?

light clicking...like a whisper, retard.


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[deathcurse]

You're a shitty writer because you can't accept feedback.

Have fun throwing your money away on this shit!

[CrouchingStonerHiddenBong]

I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.

[Son_of_Sam_I_Am]

[SoulsOfBlack]

I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.

I think it helps to really drive the point home that they screamed really loud. The only thing that would've helped would be som emoticons like .

[SoulsOfBlack]

viewtopic.php?f=4&t=251269

kryptyc, you never answered the question.

[kriptyc]

http://www.amazon.com/gp/offer-listing/ ... dition=new

It says that 10 people have new copies for sale(one copy for 145 dollars )...how is this possible? I don't really know how this thing works...

it's just so fucking good.

[kriptyc]

I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.

forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.

[CrouchingStonerHiddenBong]

middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder

Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.

[Son_of_Sam_I_Am]

Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.

LMGDAO!!!

[deathcurse]

forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.

You need to grab a thesaurus.

The emotion you're trying to illustrate would be anguish. Grief implies that these women are suffering because of the loss of a loved one. There's no indication that these women even knew the people being chopped up into six inch pieces. Did they? You have a tendency to create scenes and then describe nothing. Anyway, grief is an emotion for after the brain has processed this loss. During the massacre, their emotions would most likely be fear, terror, etc.

Do you honestly not understand human emotions? If that's the case, I suggest you find another hobby.

This misuse of "grief" makes the exclamation point even funnier. "Women screamed with annoyance!" "Women screamed with indifference!"

By the way, middle eastern women are the only women who scream when they see people chopped up? Interesting.

[kriptyc]

middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder

Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.

YOU ARE A FUCKING IDIOT????

[kriptyc]

forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.

You need to grab a thesaurus.

The emotion you're trying to illustrate would be anguish. Grief implies that these women are suffering because of the loss of a loved one. There's no indication that these women even knew the people being chopped up into six inch pieces. Did they? You have a tendency to create scenes and then describe nothing. Anyway, grief is an emotion for after the brain has processed this loss. During the massacre, their emotions would most likely be fear, terror, etc.

No, they know it is grief...

Do you honestly not understand human emotions? If that's the case, I suggest you find another hobby.

This misuse of "grief" makes the exclamation point even funnier. "Women screamed with annoyance!" "Women screamed with indifference!"

By the way, middle eastern women are the only women who scream when they see people chopped up? Interesting.

allllalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalal?

[kriptyc]

Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.

LMGDAO?

[deathcurse]

No, they know it is grief...

Who? These fictional characters?

I don't even think they qualify as characters. This all reads like some retard's fever dream. You're the only character in this mess.

[CrouchingStonerHiddenBong]

I could smear a fucking turd on a piece of construction paper and it would not only be more grammatically correct than that 21st chromosome between covers, it would sell better too.

[kriptyc]

No, they know it is grief...

Who? These fictional characters?

I don't even think they qualify as characters. This all reads like some retard's fever dream. You're the only character in this mess.

I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.

So you bought the book, douchecunt?

[CrouchingStonerHiddenBong]

Who the fuck would pay for that?

[kriptyc]

Who the fuck would pay for that?

Pon Padavona(deathcurse).

[deathcurse]

I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.

There is no such person.

And if there is, she used the wrong word.

So you bought the book, douchecunt?

You know I didn't.

Total sold: zero...point...zero.

[kriptyc]

I could smear a fucking turd on a piece of construction paper and it would not only be more grammatically correct than that 21st chromosome between covers, it would sell better too.

yeah, crap does sell well.

[deathcurse]

Pon

That's the cream you use to lube up a dog's butthole. I'm pretty sure a jar of cream didn't buy your book either.

[kriptyc]

I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.

There is no such person.

And if there is, she used the wrong word.
.

It is the only word that can describe what she felt.



http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=usjptZS-_-k

[CrouchingStonerHiddenBong]

What makes you think deathcurse bought your mongoloid manifesto, slicer?

[deathcurse]

It is the only word that can describe what she felt.

I assure you it's not.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=usjptZS-_-k

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2V3CfD8TPac

[kriptyc]

Pon

That's the cream you use to lube up a dog's butthole. I'm pretty sure a jar of cream didn't buy your book either.

shut up you fucking jar of cream?

[kriptyc]

It is the only word that can describe what she felt.

I assure you it's not.

tell me one word that describes grief better than grief.

[deathcurse]

tell me one word that describes grief better than grief.

What you're describing isn't grief.

WHY AM I EXPLAINING THIS TO A RETARD!!!!

Okay, it's grief. Don't try to become a better writer. Continue to self-publish rambling, sub-retarded nonsense that no one would ever buy. Trust me - I like it much better that way.

You somehow became a worse writer over the years. How is that possible?