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Posted: **Thu Jul 14, 2011 6:44 pm**

kriptyc wrote:what are you my fucking agent now?

No, I'm not your agent. I actually exist.

Posted: **Thu Jul 14, 2011 7:09 pm**

kriptyc wrote:At least his writer’s block had been completely shattered

Thank God for that!

You do know it's not an actual block, right?

kriptyc wrote:He drove to town just to stock up on potato chips and soda.

You ran out of food so you go buy chips and soda? No wonder you're so fucking fat.

kriptyc wrote:He had had an intense vision

Explain to me why this needed two had's.

kriptyc wrote:He knew in his gut

That's the chips and soda.

kriptyc wrote:The green and white symbol

You were watching the St. Patrick's Day parade, doofus.

kriptyc wrote:This fence had a name: the guillotine fence.

"Say, boss. What do you we call this thing? It's half fence, half guillotine."

"THE GUILLOTINE FENCE."

kriptyc wrote:Then they were all quickly beheaded with a sword.

Huh? That's not a guillotine.

kriptyc wrote:One prisoner sat on the ground where he had his arms and legs sliced off in six inch sections.

Were these sections being measured?

kriptyc wrote:Women screamed with grief!

I think you mean terror or horror. Grief implies a sadness. Who is watching someone getting chopped into six inch pieces and then reacting with mere sadness?

kriptyc wrote: That is what Tom was writing about: the strange power of this evil and its unholy ability to rip a baby’s face off with a smile.

Wait, what? Who's ripping babies faces off?

kriptyc wrote:With extreme intelligence

How would you know it if you saw it?

kriptyc wrote:Finally, he clicked off his computer

Who clicks off their computer?

kriptyc wrote:Before he fell asleep, he felt as if a hand was touching his leg, and then it whispered in his ear before flying off. He didn’t hear words, more of a clicking sound that reminded him of an insect.

So was it a whisper or a clicking?

kriptyc wrote:He saw the image of sand dunes under orange sunlight, but the light felt filthy and ancient.

What the fuck? How can light feel filthy and ancient?

kriptyc wrote:And that clicking sound was like some kind of communication used before words.

People still communicate with clicking sounds. In fact, the word "click" is a clicking sound.

Also, was it like some kind of communication or was it some kind of communication?

kriptyc wrote: It said, “I’m here.” Tom knew that was true and then fell asleep.

Wow. Even Tom is bored with this story.

Posted: **Thu Jul 14, 2011 10:04 pm**

deathcurse wrote:
kriptyc wrote:

kriptyc wrote:He had had an intense vision
Explain to me why this needed two had's.

because it was previous, idiot.

kriptyc wrote:Then they were all quickly beheaded with a sword.
Huh? That's not a guillotine.

right, because it is the guillotineFENCE, moron

kriptyc wrote:Women screamed with grief!
I think you mean terror or horror. Grief implies a sadness. Who is watching someone getting chopped into six inch pieces and then reacting with mere sadness?

no, this was different than just horror, fool.

kriptyc wrote:Finally, he clicked off his computer
Who clicks off their computer?

it's not hard to do, just a click--what are you fucking deaf?

kriptyc wrote:Before he fell asleep, he felt as if a hand was touching his leg, and then it whispered in his ear before flying off. He didn’t hear words, more of a clicking sound that reminded him of an insect.
So was it a whisper or a clicking?

light clicking...like a whisper, retard.

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Posted: **Fri Jul 15, 2011 3:18 am**

You're a shitty writer because you can't accept feedback.

Have fun throwing your money away on this shit!

Posted: **Fri Jul 15, 2011 4:31 am**

I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.

Posted: **Fri Jul 15, 2011 8:55 am**

Posted: **Fri Jul 15, 2011 9:16 am**

CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.

I think it helps to really drive the point home that they screamed really loud. The only thing that would've helped would be som emoticons like

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Posted: **Fri Jul 15, 2011 10:45 am**

viewtopic.php?f=4&t=251269

kryptyc, you never answered the question.

Posted: **Fri Jul 15, 2011 6:46 pm**

Grendel wrote:http://www.amazon.com/gp/offer-listing/ ... dition=new

It says that 10 people have new copies for sale(one copy for 145 dollars )...how is this possible? I don't really know how this thing works...

it's just so fucking good.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 7:41 am**

CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.

forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 10:41 am**

kriptyc wrote:middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder

Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 11:25 am**

CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote: Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.

LMGDAO!!!

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 3:01 pm**

kriptyc wrote:forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.

You need to grab a thesaurus.

The emotion you're trying to illustrate would be anguish. Grief implies that these women are suffering because of the loss of a loved one. There's no indication that these women even knew the people being chopped up into six inch pieces. Did they? You have a tendency to create scenes and then describe nothing. Anyway, grief is an emotion for after the brain has processed this loss. During the massacre, their emotions would most likely be fear, terror, etc.

Do you honestly not understand human emotions? If that's the case, I suggest you find another hobby.

This misuse of "grief" makes the exclamation point even funnier. "Women screamed with annoyance!" "Women screamed with indifference!"

By the way, middle eastern women are the only women who scream when they see people chopped up? Interesting.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 4:29 pm**

CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:
kriptyc wrote:middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder

Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.

YOU ARE A FUCKING IDIOT????

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 4:42 pm**

deathcurse wrote:
kriptyc wrote:forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.
You need to grab a thesaurus.

The emotion you're trying to illustrate would be anguish. Grief implies that these women are suffering because of the loss of a loved one. There's no indication that these women even knew the people being chopped up into six inch pieces. Did they? You have a tendency to create scenes and then describe nothing. Anyway, grief is an emotion for after the brain has processed this loss. During the massacre, their emotions would most likely be fear, terror, etc.

No, they know it is grief...

Do you honestly not understand human emotions? If that's the case, I suggest you find another hobby.

This misuse of "grief" makes the exclamation point even funnier. "Women screamed with annoyance!" "Women screamed with indifference!"

By the way, middle eastern women are the only women who scream when they see people chopped up? Interesting.

allllalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalal?

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 4:48 pm**

Son_of_Sam_I_Am wrote:
CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote: Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.
LMGDAO?

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 4:59 pm**

kriptyc wrote:No, they know it is grief...

Who? These fictional characters?

I don't even think they qualify as characters. This all reads like some retard's fever dream. You're the only character in this mess.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:00 pm**

I could smear a fucking turd on a piece of construction paper and it would not only be more grammatically correct than that 21st chromosome between covers, it would sell better too.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:07 pm**

deathcurse wrote:
kriptyc wrote:No, they know it is grief...
Who? These fictional characters?

I don't even think they qualify as characters. This all reads like some retard's fever dream. You're the only character in this mess.

I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.

So you bought the book, douchecunt?

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:08 pm**

Who the fuck would pay for that?

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:12 pm**

CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:Who the fuck would pay for that?

Pon Padavona(deathcurse).

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:12 pm**

kriptyc wrote:I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.

There is no such person.

And if there is, she used the wrong word.

kriptyc wrote: So you bought the book, douchecunt?

You know I didn't.

Total sold: zero...point...zero.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:13 pm**

CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:I could smear a fucking turd on a piece of construction paper and it would not only be more grammatically correct than that 21st chromosome between covers, it would sell better too.

yeah, crap does sell well.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:15 pm**

kriptyc wrote:Pon

That's the cream you use to lube up a dog's butthole. I'm pretty sure a jar of cream didn't buy your book either.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:17 pm**

deathcurse wrote:
kriptyc wrote:I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.
There is no such person.

And if there is, she used the wrong word.
.

It is the only word that can describe what she felt.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=usjptZS-_-k

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:18 pm**

What makes you think deathcurse bought your mongoloid manifesto, slicer?

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:18 pm**

kriptyc wrote:It is the only word that can describe what she felt.

I assure you it's not.

kriptyc wrote:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=usjptZS-_-k

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2V3CfD8TPac

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:19 pm**

deathcurse wrote:
kriptyc wrote:Pon
That's the cream you use to lube up a dog's butthole. I'm pretty sure a jar of cream didn't buy your book either.

shut up you fucking jar of cream?

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:25 pm**

deathcurse wrote:
kriptyc wrote:It is the only word that can describe what she felt.
I assure you it's not.

tell me one word that describes grief better than grief.

Posted: **Sat Jul 16, 2011 5:30 pm**

kriptyc wrote:tell me one word that describes grief better than grief.

What you're describing isn't grief.

WHY AM I EXPLAINING THIS TO A RETARD!!!!

Okay, it's grief. Don't try to become a better writer. Continue to self-publish rambling, sub-retarded nonsense that no one would ever buy. Trust me - I like it much better that way.

You somehow became a worse writer over the years. How is that possible?

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