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slicer's masterstroke
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Thank God for that!kriptyc wrote:At least his writer’s block had been completely shattered
You do know it's not an actual block, right?
You ran out of food so you go buy chips and soda? No wonder you're so fucking fat.kriptyc wrote:He drove to town just to stock up on potato chips and soda.
Explain to me why this needed two had's.kriptyc wrote:He had had an intense vision
That's the chips and soda.kriptyc wrote:He knew in his gut
You were watching the St. Patrick's Day parade, doofus.kriptyc wrote:The green and white symbol
"Say, boss. What do you we call this thing? It's half fence, half guillotine."kriptyc wrote:This fence had a name: the guillotine fence.
"THE GUILLOTINE FENCE."
Huh? That's not a guillotine.kriptyc wrote:Then they were all quickly beheaded with a sword.
Were these sections being measured?kriptyc wrote:One prisoner sat on the ground where he had his arms and legs sliced off in six inch sections.
I think you mean terror or horror. Grief implies a sadness. Who is watching someone getting chopped into six inch pieces and then reacting with mere sadness?kriptyc wrote:Women screamed with grief!
Wait, what? Who's ripping babies faces off?kriptyc wrote: That is what Tom was writing about: the strange power of this evil and its unholy ability to rip a baby’s face off with a smile.
How would you know it if you saw it?kriptyc wrote:With extreme intelligence
Who clicks off their computer?kriptyc wrote:Finally, he clicked off his computer
So was it a whisper or a clicking?kriptyc wrote:Before he fell asleep, he felt as if a hand was touching his leg, and then it whispered in his ear before flying off. He didn’t hear words, more of a clicking sound that reminded him of an insect.
What the fuck? How can light feel filthy and ancient?kriptyc wrote:He saw the image of sand dunes under orange sunlight, but the light felt filthy and ancient.
People still communicate with clicking sounds. In fact, the word "click" is a clicking sound.kriptyc wrote:And that clicking sound was like some kind of communication used before words.
Also, was it like some kind of communication or was it some kind of communication?
Wow. Even Tom is bored with this story.kriptyc wrote: It said, “I’m here.” Tom knew that was true and then fell asleep.
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Re: slicer's masterstroke
deathcurse wrote:kriptyc wrote:
Explain to me why this needed two had's.kriptyc wrote:He had had an intense vision
because it was previous, idiot.
Huh? That's not a guillotine.kriptyc wrote:Then they were all quickly beheaded with a sword.
right, because it is the guillotineFENCE, moron
I think you mean terror or horror. Grief implies a sadness. Who is watching someone getting chopped into six inch pieces and then reacting with mere sadness?kriptyc wrote:Women screamed with grief!
no, this was different than just horror, fool.
Who clicks off their computer?kriptyc wrote:Finally, he clicked off his computer
it's not hard to do, just a click--what are you fucking deaf?
So was it a whisper or a clicking?kriptyc wrote:Before he fell asleep, he felt as if a hand was touching his leg, and then it whispered in his ear before flying off. He didn’t hear words, more of a clicking sound that reminded him of an insect.
light clicking...like a whisper, retard.
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You're a shitty writer because you can't accept feedback.
Have fun throwing your money away on this shit!
Have fun throwing your money away on this shit!
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I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.
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I think it helps to really drive the point home that they screamed really loud. The only thing that would've helped would be som emoticons like .CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.
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EZrocker wrote:I am not an "obsessive Jani Lane fan". I don't even own a Warrant album, and I have never seen Jani live. I think Uncle Tom's Cabin is a good tune, but otherwise I could give a shit.
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it's just so fucking good.Grendel wrote:http://www.amazon.com/gp/offer-listing/ ... dition=new
It says that 10 people have new copies for sale(one copy for 145 dollars )...how is this possible? I don't really know how this thing works...
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forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:I LOL'd @ "Women screamed with grief!" too - the exclamation point is so fucking remedial.
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kriptyc wrote:middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder
Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.
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LMGDAO!!!CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote: Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.
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You need to grab a thesaurus.kriptyc wrote:forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.
The emotion you're trying to illustrate would be anguish. Grief implies that these women are suffering because of the loss of a loved one. There's no indication that these women even knew the people being chopped up into six inch pieces. Did they? You have a tendency to create scenes and then describe nothing. Anyway, grief is an emotion for after the brain has processed this loss. During the massacre, their emotions would most likely be fear, terror, etc.
Do you honestly not understand human emotions? If that's the case, I suggest you find another hobby.
This misuse of "grief" makes the exclamation point even funnier. "Women screamed with annoyance!" "Women screamed with indifference!"
By the way, middle eastern women are the only women who scream when they see people chopped up? Interesting.
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YOU ARE A FUCKING IDIOT????CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:kriptyc wrote:middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder
Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.
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No, they know it is grief...deathcurse wrote:You need to grab a thesaurus.kriptyc wrote:forgive your ignorance, because middle eastern women usually do scream with an exclamation point! especially when it comes to amputation and murder which they know/feel/grieve in a way that some mall raised ohio chick could never fathom.
The emotion you're trying to illustrate would be anguish. Grief implies that these women are suffering because of the loss of a loved one. There's no indication that these women even knew the people being chopped up into six inch pieces. Did they? You have a tendency to create scenes and then describe nothing. Anyway, grief is an emotion for after the brain has processed this loss. During the massacre, their emotions would most likely be fear, terror, etc.
allllalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalalal?Do you honestly not understand human emotions? If that's the case, I suggest you find another hobby.
This misuse of "grief" makes the exclamation point even funnier. "Women screamed with annoyance!" "Women screamed with indifference!"
By the way, middle eastern women are the only women who scream when they see people chopped up? Interesting.
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Son_of_Sam_I_Am wrote:LMGDAO?CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote: Women in Ohio scream with question marks since we want to know how you got to be so fucking stupid.
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Who? These fictional characters?kriptyc wrote:No, they know it is grief...
I don't even think they qualify as characters. This all reads like some retard's fever dream. You're the only character in this mess.
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I could smear a fucking turd on a piece of construction paper and it would not only be more grammatically correct than that 21st chromosome between covers, it would sell better too.
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I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.deathcurse wrote:Who? These fictional characters?kriptyc wrote:No, they know it is grief...
I don't even think they qualify as characters. This all reads like some retard's fever dream. You're the only character in this mess.
So you bought the book, douchecunt?
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Who the fuck would pay for that?
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Pon Padavona(deathcurse).CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:Who the fuck would pay for that?
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There is no such person.kriptyc wrote:I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.
And if there is, she used the wrong word.
You know I didn't.kriptyc wrote: So you bought the book, douchecunt?
Total sold: zero...point...zero.
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yeah, crap does sell well.CrouchingStonerHiddenBong wrote:I could smear a fucking turd on a piece of construction paper and it would not only be more grammatically correct than that 21st chromosome between covers, it would sell better too.
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That's the cream you use to lube up a dog's butthole. I'm pretty sure a jar of cream didn't buy your book either.kriptyc wrote:Pon
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It is the only word that can describe what she felt.deathcurse wrote:There is no such person.kriptyc wrote:I talked to a woman who knew this so well she could feel it in her bones as grief...the image (vision) was hers.
And if there is, she used the wrong word.
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=usjptZS-_-k
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What makes you think deathcurse bought your mongoloid manifesto, slicer?
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I assure you it's not.kriptyc wrote:It is the only word that can describe what she felt.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2V3CfD8TPackriptyc wrote:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=usjptZS-_-k
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shut up you fucking jar of cream?deathcurse wrote:That's the cream you use to lube up a dog's butthole. I'm pretty sure a jar of cream didn't buy your book either.kriptyc wrote:Pon
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tell me one word that describes grief better than grief.deathcurse wrote:I assure you it's not.kriptyc wrote:It is the only word that can describe what she felt.
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What you're describing isn't grief.kriptyc wrote:tell me one word that describes grief better than grief.
WHY AM I EXPLAINING THIS TO A RETARD!!!!
Okay, it's grief. Don't try to become a better writer. Continue to self-publish rambling, sub-retarded nonsense that no one would ever buy. Trust me - I like it much better that way.
You somehow became a worse writer over the years. How is that possible?
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